rough attempt at opening scene.... slightly outdated chapter outline.

I know this blog is getting boring. That is why I have set up http://theelvesattic.blogspot.com for anyone who just wants to read comedy and dark essays, rather than the decidedly less professional and amusing notes of a writer who, before the electronic age made publishing simple, would have thrown them all away during some move when there were just too many fucking boxes, you know?








Since I am trying to get my thought completly clarified on where these scenes to need to be, what needs to be said, what plot is moving along, and what underlying messages I am imparting to subconscious ones and critics alike.... I am bored as hell. I would rather just make up characters and have them do amusing things.

I recently read that the first 50 pages of the novel are the most difficult, because after that the characters are alive in your mind enough to have lives of thier own where they speack words from a center other than the writers.






Present synopsis



Matt, Zander, Jimmy, Johnaton live together in a store that Jim inherited. It is hot property in an expensive neighborhood; they run a game store on one side, and an art gallery on the other, but mostly they just hang out, smoke weed, and paint and write and try to score and sell weed. They also have a very successful web sight, and people sometimes crash there from all over the world. Mike Paite shows up on the first day, something of a cool hipster who can draw faces like a mother fucker, and starts doing them in the gallery and giving the house a cut, so they go to the back, which is open space and loft like, and build another bed room. Their rooms are basically large boxes in the storage area in the back of the store, though they have a lounge which is a living room for them and the customers and whoever comes in to buy weed, etc….
They have a near wolf, named padre, and two cats and a rabbit. A gangbanger moves in across the street, and through their association with him they learn that dog fighting is going on in the neighborhood. After finding out the cops won’t help because one of the gang bangers is gathering evidence for them. They do everything they can, but nothing helps…. the gang bangers break out their windows or some sort of warning. Then one day their own dog is missing. They find a local gang banger selling and torture him to find out where the dog is. Paite goes too far, gouges out the guy’s eyes and then slashes his throat – to the horror of the others. They then drive off and find the kid who is trying to get padre into a junkyard where the fight is; the wolf is basically pulling the kid around. They get the dog, At this point, they hear from inside the screams of a dog dying. And Paite again slashes the kid’s throat

The dog’s death screams go on and on, and then there is a shot. And just like that two more dogs are growling and howling in pain inside. Matt starts walking toward the fight with his gun, saying he was going to stop the fight. Paite follows. Jimmy and Johnathon do not want to go in, but they do. As soon as they see a circle of people around the fight, Paite opens up on them. A few are armed, and Jimmy and Johnathon are both shot down by one of them while matt and Paite are killing other guys, It is a blood bath, and Paite goes around firing kill shots into their heads, then Paite kills the dogs to quote ‘stop their memories or anybody else from torturing them.
The entire thing horrifies Matt. He and Paite leave together, go back to the store and split the cash they have, take a few paintings and games and other shit they think they can sell along the way, then hop into their car and drive… when Matt asks where they are going, Paite tells him, “Someplace warm. Someplace that makes you forget you were ever anywhere else. I have a cousin in Florida. We can surf on her coach until something comes up. We’ve got enough weed to deal with anything.�









Chapter outlines


ONE
Opens in store, with them making fun of customer. X comes in later, and introduces himself as they guy who their dealer sent over because they were trying to rent out a room. X knows them from their website. He establishes that he can make money drawing faces, so they invite him to live there.

Paite sets up a chair in front of the gallery, starts making a few hundred bucks (his examples he lays out to advertise are great. When he gives the boys a 50% cut, and asks them if they want him to hang around and drew portraits. The cops were always chasing him off the streets, but with a business backing him he was legal.
The setting is three large rooms, two smaller rectangles containing the stores, and then a large square of area behind each store where they live, store stuff, etc…. They have also built a living room area in the game room, and the gallery, so people can hang out playing games on video in one room, and dund=grons and dragons and war games can take place in the quieter gallery. Selling anything is incidently to them, because they make enough money off the weed to support their art, and none of them are extravagant.
The living room areas are slpoppy, second hand furnitiure, broken in cushions, red flower design, a co huge coffee table – oplyboards with mild cartons underneath, that serves as a game board for the larger war ga,mes. This should be in the mgame room, too. In the gallery’s living room, there should be a tv.

TWO

They throw a party and get in an argument which shows where they are coming from and describes their manifesto, which someone should drunkenly read. X should listen very intently, thinking they are serious. Later in the night, when someone causes a little bit of trouble, X kicks his ass too much, and the others, while mildly impressed, become ever so aware that this man is different than they are. Gang banger comes into party with a Bike, explaining that he wants to sell it. Jimmy buys it against Zander and Johnathon’s better wishes. ) The gang banger starts trying to sell them stolen stuff again the next day,

THREE
A few days later, when Zander is there alone with two so called friends, gang bangers come smashing in with bats and try to steal their weed. One kid locks himself in the back room where there are some brass knuckles, but he won’t unlock the door. It turns out that a gang who is rivals with the guy they bought the bike from now consider them enemies …. Rudy comes along just when Jim wants a new cat.
Signs of dog fighting begin to appear in the neighborhood, along with a plethora of people filling their front window with pictures of missing cats and dogs normally associated with fighting. The gang banger asks a lot of questions about padre and he gets bragged up. .


A customer comes in while matt is alone in the store watching porn and waking off. She is wearing a long sexy white fur. The girl says she wants to bring some of her friends over from the bar next door who were just talking about being horny.. They merely come in and point at his protruding pecker and laugh, calling him a geek. X has come home by then. He spray paints them with black, then disappears before the cops they call can show up. This is when matt realizes that he doesn’t even know x’s name, where he was from, etc…. the cops believe him when he say’s x is just someone who comes in once in awhile.

the gang bangers car has to get smashed, on both sides on different nights, to make the point he is out with his old gang or something



A DRUNKEN OLD ROOMATE SHOW UP IN THE MIDLE OF THE NIGHT, AND EVERYONE THERE IS used to taking his shit, but x throws him out. He should say something about the Bull in prison, the guy who was the toughest, and how he learned that outside he was almost always the bull. He can say he was never raped but they don’t quit believe him because he tells paite’s story, which is too convienant to be true.
4) Write the manifesto





Herion addict comes over and gives jim some for his tooth ache, then does the other bit he was supposed to save for jim when he woke up/ talk about how the difference between pot and everything else is significant. Have the boys write a blog about this, one that finally tries to set the pot issue aright. Legalize and then leave us the fuck alone.



SIX
, Paite can be the boof, near rascist, but he would always treat blacks well, but in the the time he works at the store he starts catching thieves and all of them are black, and some have been coming around for awhile. But at the same time, he is cool to blacks in general, he just thinks that they are victims of their lack of power. And the easiest way to get power is to steal, take risks selling drugs, join a gang…. This hatred of Paite’s will come to a head when he breaks down and tells a story about a ‘near’ rape that they all think really happened.
. Two out of three of the thieves that x catches are black..
Paite would say that keeping all of them alive is making the world stupider
Jimmy won’t hear any rascist remarks, and johnathon will kind of be in the middle. Matt thinks everyone is the same. Zander goes the same as matt.
Johnathon becomes convinced that the signs he is seeing around the neighborhood point to dog fighting, and he does this research after seeing a dog passed from a young black kid to the gang banger that they know. He lets the others know

SEVEN

Paite goes after the gang banger (who it turns out is turning evidence for the fbi and thus hated by all gangs), and finds him on the corner where he, a thirty five year old fat guy, sells crack and shit beside seventeen year old kids. X immediately wants to beat them up with a pipe, but the others stop him. . Keeping the electric company at bay (an opening scene about fearing the gas man cutting them off could work)
EIGHT

Tale of gang bangers breaking in. One hides in bathroom, other gets beat until they get the weed and leave. Eventually the get them out the door and call call the cops. Unfortunately, Paul burned a doobie while they were waiting for Chicago’s finest to show up, and the cops smelled the weed and assumed the rip off was drug related and as such they made it clear that they weren’t going to waste any time trying to catch the gang bangers who almost killed Paul.. The cop looked around the apartment like he expected to see a pile of needles or a dead body or something, then told us that he didn’t really want to get involved. “Quit dealing, assholes. We don’t give a shit if you fuckers kill each other.�



NINE

1) X challenges them to live up to their philosophy by stopping all of the dog fighting.
2) They decide to quit writing about the shit and erase all files about it, in preparation for doing the crime.
Paite: revenge is essential for the beast that we are, and humans are always trying to gain power. He learned about it in prison, and know sees it everywhere around him, a metaphor for the guards are the cops and woman use their ‘pussy’ power, or as paite says about some of them, they ‘talk with their pussies.’

Johnathon should probably object to this kind of language usage on the basis of his feminist ideas and try to explain why politically correct is not something that should have been vilified,.:
The gang bangers try to get them turned in for dealing, but the landlord is convinced that all the young boys who come over are Jimmy’s lovers. Play this up like he is a slut, a very funny scene. All jimmy will say is, “I got to have it.� Or something,.
They find out the gang bangers are being protected by the fbi, after one of them who sells them stuff gets busted and out right away, bragging it was because of the fbi. He was busted for band equipment that he tried to sell to them.


10


Padre disappears and Paite finds the nearest gang banger, drags him into an alley and shoves a knife into his eye, then asks where the dog is… the kid tells him and then Paite cuts out his other eye.. Everyone freaks out, but paiet says he wants the guy to suffer for awhile, then kills him. They take a machine gun from this guy, and have two pistols that they picked up after the problems started.
By luck, a young black gang banger is trying to walk padre to the fight and the wolf is too big for him, pulling everywhere… and when he tries to yell at him or smack him Padre snarls back like that is not a good idea and the kid doesn’t try it again. They stop and get the dog from the kid, then X slits the kids throat. Some one is crying at this point. X tells them the kid would have just found another dog.

ELEVEN
The dog’s death screams go on and on, then there is a shot. And just like that two more dogs are growling and howling in pain inside. Matt starts walking toward the fight with his gun, saying he was going to stop the fight. Paite follows. Jimmy and Johnathon do not want to go in, but they do. As soon as they see a circle of people around the fight, Paite opens up on them. A few are armed, and Jimmy and Johnathon are both shot down by one of them while matt and Paite are killing other guys,. It is a blood bath, and Paite goes around firing kill shots into their heads, then Paite kills the dogs to quote ‘stop their memories or anybody else from torturing them.




Chapter twelve


Matt is horrified by the entire thing. He and Paite leave together, go back to the store and split the cash they have, take a few paintings and games and other shit they think they can sell along the way, then hop into their car and drive… when Matt asks where they are going, Paite tells him,. “Someplace warm. Someplace that makes you forget you were ever anywhere else. I have a cousin in Florida. We can surf on her coach until something comes up. We’ve got enough weed to deal with anything.�















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